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Was it an act,
Or simply a lie?
The things you said,
That made me cry.

All those words which brought me pain,
Swam in my mind, again and again.

Did you really mean it all?
Did it please you to watch me fall?

The times we spent “together at last”,
Seemed to pass ever so fast.

And when you walked away from me,
I stood there sobbing; I wanted to flee.

To run away, or follow you,
All these decisions, what was I to do?

I called your name, you didn’t turn round,
I thought you were my true love that I’d finally found.

The tears escaped, and flooded out,
Without you, I’m without…
©2004-2009 ~Tinsel-Wig
:icontinsel-wig:

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I just did this poem, took about 5 mins, it's crap but nevermind, wrote it coz someone I love is in a mood with me...:(

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:iconska--kid:
Lame just like you :angry:

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:threaten: Scared punk?

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Battle zones

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~TheNewCity
:icontinsel-wig:
:| Thanks.

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:iconska--kid:
aw baby drop dead

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:threaten: Scared punk?

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Battle zones

~writers-bench

~TheNewCity
:icontinsel-wig:
That's really childish and pathetic.

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:rose:I Beg To Dream And Differ From The Hollow Lies:blackrose:

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:iconska--kid:
so is the poem trying to make me want you back

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:threaten: Scared punk?

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Battle zones

~writers-bench

~TheNewCity
:icontinsel-wig:
Why would this poem have anything to do with you?

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:rose:I Beg To Dream And Differ From The Hollow Lies:blackrose:

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[link] <-- Make Povertry History
[link] <-- Make Trade Fair
:iconska--kid:
you just happen to submit it after I get mad at you and I was still goign out wiht you and you kept saying you love me I said I loved you till I just couldn't go on

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:threaten: Scared punk?

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Battle zones

~writers-bench

~TheNewCity
:iconfallout-boy:
Lol will, did you know? the world doesnt start with WI and end with LL. Sorry if this is a shock to you.
:iconfallout-boy:
Oh and, very nice poem :) It seems to build up, visually -and- poetically, and ends suddenly, just as a relationship would build up and end so abruptly as that. Keep up the good work :D

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