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Sorry, I had to delete this deviation due to personal reasons.

Thank you for all your comments, they are very much appreciated!
©2005-2009 ~Tinsel-Wig
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:iconred-shadow-sakura:
OMG that is the most awesomest thing I've ever read! :+fav:

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Anyone, Anything, Anyway, Anybody
I want you, I need you, I'll have you
I won't Let anybody have you
Obey, Believe, Just trust me, Worship, Live for
Be grateful, Be honest, Be precious, Be mine
Just love me
:iconnerdo-sez-bo:
Excelent choice of vocabulary.

"I am the water
When you cry.
I am the demon
Who will never die." - This stanza is utter perfection. Utter utter perfection. Well done.

Favs all around chaps :D

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So sell your suit and tie, and come and live with me.
Leukemia, schizophrenia, polyethylene.
:iconcharlotte-loves-u:
Fantastic, very deep and beautiful.....:+fav: :rose:

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Still thumbin' my way to Vegas
:icondeadandbroken16:
absolutely amazing :heart: i really love this piece, and it really touched me in a way... very well written. :+favlove:

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it took a while for her to figure out she could run but when she did she was long gone, long gone.


<3
:iconfluffehburger:
Wow. I can't seem to think of a comment to do justice to it.

Amazing.

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Arg ye maties
:iconkio-darkblood:
Wow... just... wow... I love it hun. Goodjob! :+fav:
:iconshadowofeternity:
i like the concept...reminds me of the poem by sylvia plath. such smooth transitions and rhyme. there are a few stanzas that have a few more syllables. although it kinda seems like a rough patch in the poem's seemless rhythm, it holds its ground and proves almost like a climax of sorts. =)

excellent job :clap:
:iconska--kid:
omg noooo get out of me:( Great peice :+fav:

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:threaten: Scared punk?

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Battle zones

~writers-bench

~TheNewCity
:iconskiein:
Wow, short dramatic lines that stick in one's head. Really packs a punch. But just in the second line, "you're every sin" should be "your" (I think:l), I am only informing you of this rather technical aspect (I am a firm believer that poetry, or any other kind of writing for that matter is about emotions and expressions- who gives a damn about the actual setting outs and typing) because if it was my writing I would hate it if no one told me>.< Anyway, really liked this piece, well done :nod:
:iconslangtide-di:
better than anything i ever produced!

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Drinkadrinkadrinkadrinkandfigh t!

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